Re: [Geopriv] WGLC: draft-ietf-geopriv-held-identity-extensions

 
> I have read the document and I think it's ready to go.
> Laura

Likewise here, except for minor nits:

intro - s/addresses/addressed/

§1 - s/,or/,nor/ how that third-party is authenticated...

§3.1, paragraph 4 - indented para, or quote?

§3.1.1, line 1 - s/requests/request/
     paragraph 3 - s/it's/its/
     also more indented paragraphs

§3.2.2, paras 1 and 3 - shouldn't these read "device" element instead of "target"?

§4.1.1, para 2 - s/eitehr/either/

§5, para 6 - indented paragraph

§5.2, para 1 - s/agree/agreed/

On the indented paragraphs I'm simply not sure if this is a formattting error, or if you're attempting to make these the sort of "sidebar" explanatory note sometimes seen in text books.  IMHO, that simply doesn't work in plain ASCII text.

kind regards,

Ray

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