Just finished a review. Attached is a Word version with comments. Mostly
small nits - some spelling, perhaps some missing prepositions. Also some
questions. I tries to read this as someone who is slightly familiar with the
technology area but no expert (easy for me!). For the most part, I was able
to follow and understand the content and application of the document. There
were a few instances where I became lost. There were also a few instances
where an additional definition or clarification of a term not used before in
the document would really help.
Overall, no conceptual or approach issues. Well written.
And of course I have probably incorrectly provided comments and suggested
edits, but when dealing with about a dozen standards orgs . . .
Regards
Carl Reed
CTO
OGC
PS to OGC tstaff - just a FYI
----- Original Message -----
From: "James M. Polk" <jmpolk@cisco.com>
To: <geopriv@ietf.org>
Sent: Sunday, March 07, 2010 3:38 PM
Subject: [Geopriv] Submitted draft-ietf-geopriv-dhcp-lbyr-uri-option-07
> I've updated the draft-ietf-geopriv-dhcp-lbyr-uri-option-07 ID.
>
> I addressed what I believe is the final open issue (wrt allowing and IANA
> registering HTTP: and HTTPS: URIs), with incorporated text covering the
> conditions these are allowed -- which was offered by Richard. I didn't
> change his offered text (in Section 3.3). I also didn't delete any text in
> this version - only changed the dates, therefore, the diff should be easy
> to figure out ;-) i.e., it should only be showing the paragraph Richard
> offered - which I thought addressed the open issue well.
>
> Comments are welcome and appreciated
>
> ABSTRACT
> This document creates a Dynamic Host Configuration Protocol (DHCP)
> Option for transmitting a client's geolocation Uniform Resource
> Identifier (URI) of a client, which can be dereferenced in a
> separate transaction by the client or an entity the client sends
> this URI to.
>
> A URL for this Internet-Draft is:
> http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-geopriv-dhcp-lbyr-uri-option-07.txt
>
> James
>
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